Swanstar (Winter Chip XI)

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Swanstar (Winter Chip XI)

Postby Modus Ponens » Mon Jan 18, 2016 4:45 am

Hi, folks! Long time no post. Here's something I wrote for a school project, and I think it turned out very nicely, so I'm going to enter it into this year's Winter Chip competition over on Battle of the Bits. Before I do, I'd love to hear any feedback you all have.

The game's working title is Swanstar. It's about a young Star-man named Bow who accidentally falls to the Earth, and must get the help of a magical swan-ship named Alphaelle to return home. A good portion of the game will be spent sailing, à la Wind Waker, and this piece is the game's sailing theme. It's heavily inspired by both the Great Sea theme and Wind Garden from Super Mario Galaxy, with a little tribute to David Bowie thrown in there.

Please tell me your thoughts!

Edit: Updated the file.
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Re: Swanstar (Winter Chip XI)

Postby Modus Ponens » Tue Jan 19, 2016 2:33 am

I made a few edits and updated the file above.
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Re: Swanstar (Winter Chip XI)

Postby ollaxe » Tue Jan 19, 2016 7:44 pm

This is really nice. It's really well composed and it's very plesant to listen to.
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Re: Swanstar (Winter Chip XI)

Postby Shywolf » Thu Jan 21, 2016 4:32 am

Rather beautiful.

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Re: Swanstar (Winter Chip XI)

Postby Modus Ponens » Sat Jan 23, 2016 2:54 am

Thanks, guys.
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Re: Swanstar (Winter Chip XI)

Postby Modus Ponens » Tue Feb 02, 2016 7:33 am

(Buuuuump)

WCXI submission complete! I retooled the ending a bit to make it work better as a standalone song.
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Re: Swanstar (Winter Chip XI)

Postby meegosh » Wed Feb 03, 2016 4:02 am

Awesome. Great control over the vibrato and volume swells. Everything falls in pretty perfectly.