One of my first songs

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Manboymanmanboy
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One of my first songs

Postby Manboymanmanboy » Tue Nov 22, 2016 3:29 am

So I successfully made a song named "Mass Brain Corruption" :)
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Teuthida
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Re: One of my first songs

Postby Teuthida » Tue Nov 22, 2016 5:10 am

I normally try to be relatively kind when I criticize, but I just can't do it for this one. There is, quite frankly, nothing redeemable whatsoever about this "song" whatsoever. I would scrap this, learn/study music, and only return to the forums once you've achieved much more skill at Famitracker.
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Re: One of my first songs

Postby ChadBro2206 » Tue Nov 22, 2016 9:00 am

I will be agreeing with Teuthida (btw your music on your YouTube is pretty dang sweet, I gotta throw that out there). It lacks rhythm and order, and is overall very unpleasing to the ear.
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Re: One of my first songs

Postby Manboymanmanboy » Tue Nov 22, 2016 9:59 pm

It's supposed to be funky on purpose. Even the instruments are funky too. By the way, I am just a beginner, so yes, I need more practice.
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Re: One of my first songs

Postby The Caller » Tue Nov 22, 2016 11:00 pm

Well... at least the name is fitting...?

But really though, this is just overall bad. No offense. Also, I'm not one to point fingers, but this sounds like you just threw a bunch of notes and instruments together and called it a day. Try some actual percussion and rhythm next time, and just keep practicing. A lot.

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Re: One of my first songs

Postby Teuthida » Tue Nov 22, 2016 11:20 pm

The thing is, even if it's meant to sound weird, why would you make that your first song you ever post on the forums? You only have one chance to make a first impression, after all.
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Re: One of my first songs

Postby Chippybippers » Wed Nov 23, 2016 6:35 am

If there's one thing to praise - Pulse 1 is, while fairly out-of-key, a solid foundation for a melody. Like, I can hear the potential for one but it ain't quite there yet. Tweak it a bit and you might be able to use it in a future song.

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Re: One of my first songs

Postby Quirby64 » Fri Nov 25, 2016 7:46 pm

Going off of Chippybippers, I tried to "remake" the song so to say on what the melody could be like if you were to turn it into a full song.
What I can recommend is to go look at other songs on the forum and see how they did it - try to do similar things yourself in FT, see what sounds good and doesn't, ect. :)
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Re: One of my first songs

Postby Tupp » Tue Dec 13, 2016 11:42 pm

I found this hilarious!

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Re: One of my first songs

Postby PlasmaCore1219 » Mon Jan 09, 2017 4:41 pm

Still a bit hard on the ears, but I threw this together :D
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