(1-N163) Island Walk 1 & 2

[Quirby64]

These are two remakes of songs I made in Beepbox, an online pseudo-nes tracker thing.
Link to original Island Walk 1 :
http://www.beepbox.co/#5s2kbl00e0ftba7g0fj7i0r1w0200f0000d3201c0000h0600v0102o3210b4x8i4zhhdB4i4x8i4x8i4w004zgid18Q000h4h4h4h4p21OFzM63w0RFEUqqLGpZkR-AQ-uIWHCGK76UefZjzmUAvq0_7p6hAtKNVvkQBcugFPF01OwFDPhhljO0WDwsEePhhli1jsfz1U2CNUyqvAE4CC9VxE8w0
Link to original Island Walk 2 :
http://www.beepbox.co/#5s3kbl00e09t3a7g0fj7i0r1w1100f0000d1111c0100h0600v1212o3210b4h4z8Ngh4h4h4h4h4h4h4h4h4h4h4h4h0i8y8y8h4h4p23JFzMD602C73ceYOwgooeyKyOxjbzKsw50baqQOUkMUUKCLysrnjjm2w57siCv2C472C072gAuXXKGCCI506o4njbc-i1Fx1Pbj03CmgAPj7kjz01Y8pxx_B0K31QlQmk9DTAkkklkQ9E41j3y2GGGGGGGGGGGGGFGFwWGGGGHaGGGGGWg5csoaotkwOaU1cKso0XJ8c1KKkNUZA1j4Uzg6wd16wd0t0rMQxFFE3i6CCCw0
I tried to put a bit of a leitmotif in both of the songs, I think it came out ok.

[Teuthida]

I'm sorry to say, but these aren't very good. There's a HUGE amount of dissonance on the first one, with tritones and minor second "chords" everywhere. The melody itself is good, but the poor choice in bass just ruins the whole things.

[The Caller]

I... like them. Both of them.

The melody on both of them is pretty nice, and yes, as Teuthida said, there IS some dissonance, but not enough to bother me.

So kudos to you. Though, you could still make these better.

[Teuthida]

Hmm... I guess I just have lower tolerance for that kind of stuff than you, The Caller.

[The Caller]

Maybe you do have lower tolerance, but that's not exactly a bad thing. It serves to show you like things the right way, which is good.

[Quirby64]

Thanks for the criticism Teuthida and Caller! \.o./
I tried to change both songs to be better, like changing note and the bass, mostly the first Island Walk.

[The Caller]

Thanks for the criticism Teuthida and Caller! \.o./
I tried to change both songs to be better, like changing note and the bass, mostly the first Island Walk.

Ah yes, the first one definitely sounds better now. I still prefer the second one, though.