Life Harmony [VRC7] (Need some help :c)

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Life Harmony [VRC7] (Need some help :c)

Postby Chipcode » Fri Mar 10, 2017 2:47 am

Hola! This is my first post in the forum. I want to show you a song I've been working on lately. I like the general idea, but there is something that sounds out of place. I still don't know what it can be; maybe the rhythm, the bass or the chords; but I'm not convinced by the final result. Perhaps you who are more experienced can help me and tell me what I am doing wrong. Thanks for your time.

P.S. Sorry if my English isn't the best, I am working on it.
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Re: Life Harmony [VRC7] (Need some help :c)

Postby FloppyDisk » Fri Mar 10, 2017 3:19 am

Welcome to the forums! This song sounds very nice, with an upbeat percussion and a good chord progression. I found nothing really wrong with it, except that maybe there could more to it. Good job!
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Re: Life Harmony [VRC7] (Need some help :c)

Postby TheJuanCarlos64 » Fri Mar 10, 2017 3:52 am

Also Welcome to the Forums!
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Re: Life Harmony [VRC7] (Need some help :c)

Postby Joblez_I » Fri Mar 10, 2017 5:11 am

To be honest, I pretty much concur with Floppy Disk on this. It's quite lovely and well made, the only issue with it I see is that it's short. Great work, and welcome to the forums my friend.
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Re: Life Harmony [VRC7] (Need some help :c)

Postby Summerrrrde » Wed Mar 15, 2017 9:26 pm

Lovely tune ! What bothers you I think is that at some points the lead (Pulse 1) and the bass line (Triangle) play notes that form a minor 2nd, which can give you that feeling of slight disharmony. For instance frame 01, line 00 : lead is playing C while bass is playing C#. But I think you shouldn't bother because the result sounds really good ! Maybe you've listened to it too much and you can't really tell anymore, it happens to me all the time when I compose on a tracker ^^.