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Can Someone Make This Better?

Posted: Sun Jan 07, 2018 8:34 pm
by Electric Cero
I have finally made a short motif using FamiTracker :lol: . It's my first song so I still have a lot to learn and, I would appreciate some feedback.
(and hopefully a better version of the song!)
v5.ftm
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And here is a link to the same song but in beepbox with minor changes. https://goo.gl/9VGuxr

Re: Can Someone Make This Better?

Posted: Mon Jan 08, 2018 5:31 am
by Squidsquif
Hmm, this isn't bad for your first song (mime was complete trash)! I like the tone you got going there, it sounds like the intro to a cool boss theme. Some advice I can give is to learn a bit of music theory. That will not only make your songs sound better, but will also help you create new ones! Don't be afraid to experiment. Another piece of advice is to listen to favorite Famitracker songs (I suggest the ones in the demo folder). See what makes them so good, such as what effects they use and what they do to the instruments. Famitracker is a tough program to get the hang of, but you'll get there, just keep trying to improve!
I hope this helps, and if you have any questions, feel free to message me!(I'll try to make an edit of your song later) :D

Re: Can Someone Make This Better?

Posted: Mon Jan 08, 2018 8:29 am
by Mega Bruh X
Electric Cero wrote:I have finally made a short motif using FamiTracker :lol: . It's my first song so I still have a lot to learn and, I would appreciate some feedback.
(and hopefully a better version of the song!)
v5.ftm
(42.59 KiB) Downloaded 33 times


And here is a link to the same song but in beepbox with minor changes. https://goo.gl/9VGuxr

I actually really like what you had going on so far. As you requested, here's a small edit I made:

Re: Can Someone Make This Better?

Posted: Mon Jan 08, 2018 10:23 pm
by Electric Cero
Squidsquif wrote:Hmm, this isn't bad for your first song (mime was complete trash)! I like the tone you got going there, it sounds like the intro to a cool boss theme. Some advice I can give is to learn a bit of music theory. That will not only make your songs sound better, but will also help you create new ones! Don't be afraid to experiment. Another piece of advice is to listen to favorite Famitracker songs (I suggest the ones in the demo folder). See what makes them so good, such as what effects they use and what they do to the instruments. Famitracker is a tough program to get the hang of, but you'll get there, just keep trying to improve!
I hope this helps, and if you have any questions, feel free to message me!(I'll try to make an edit of your song later) :D

Thank you Squidsquif :D I'm only in my first year of Music Theory I. I'll be looking for some effects to toy with and I look forward to your edit of v5.
Mega Bruh X wrote:
Electric Cero wrote:I have finally made a short motif using FamiTracker :lol: . It's my first song so I still have a lot to learn and, I would appreciate some feedback.
(and hopefully a better version of the song!)
v5.ftm


And here is a link to the same song but in beepbox with minor changes. https://goo.gl/9VGuxr

I actually really like what you had going on so far. As you requested, here's a small edit I made:

I guess I need to find the newer version of famitracker, I still have 0.4.6. :lol:

Re: Can Someone Make This Better?

Posted: Mon Jan 08, 2018 11:53 pm
by Mega Bruh X
Sorry about that. You can get newer version here: viewtopic.php?f=4&t=173

Re: Can Someone Make This Better?

Posted: Tue Jan 09, 2018 1:34 am
by Electric Cero
Mega Bruh X wrote:Sorry about that. You can get newer version here: viewtopic.php?f=4&t=173

Thanks for your help, Mega Bruh. :) I like your edit btw, it sounds like it could be a city stage. Like Streets of Rage or something similar.

Re: Can Someone Make This Better?

Posted: Sat Jan 20, 2018 10:13 pm
by Electric Cero
Well, it's not much of an improvement. But I think V6 sounds more like a title theme.

Re: Can Someone Make This Better?

Posted: Wed Jan 24, 2018 6:45 pm
by TheNoobHunter
V6 definitely sounds better, but the amount of repetition and dissonant tones kinda ruins the song for me. I'd say pick a scale and stick to it. I think it would sound better if it had more of a melody as well. It sounds like it's leading up to one but never really goes anywhere

Re: Can Someone Make This Better?

Posted: Sat Jan 27, 2018 2:23 am
by Squidsquif
Lmao I meant to post this awhile ago, but I haven't had time due to school (finals, ugh) and other stuff. Anyways, here is my edit of your song (the first one)! It's not as complex as Mega Bruh X's, but I tried to make some improvements,mainly adding a percussion loop as well as adding the triangle. Let me know if you have questions ;)

Re: Can Someone Make This Better?

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2018 11:38 pm
by Electric Cero
TheNoobHunter wrote:V6 definitely sounds better, but the amount of repetition and dissonant tones kinda ruins the song for me. I'd say pick a scale and stick to it. I think it would sound better if it had more of a melody as well. It sounds like it's leading up to one but never really goes anywhere

Thank you for the feedback, TheNoobHunter, I can admit that V6 is chaotic, and I'll take your advice and finish V6.
Squidsquif wrote:Lmao I meant to post this awhile ago, but I haven't had time due to school (finals, ugh) and other stuff. Anyways, here is my edit of your song (the first one)! It's not as complex as Mega Bruh X's, but I tried to make some improvements,mainly adding a percussion loop as well as adding the triangle. Let me know if you have questions ;)

Wow, This is awesome! I like the two channel echo in the beginning, it does make it sound like an intro to a cool boss theme.
And here's a question. How do minor scale progressions work? (I already know that major scales progress like: whole, whole, half, whole, whole, whole, half)

EDIT: The reason why I'm asking is because I can't find an example that I can understand on the internet.