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Jorf
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A few songs - Feedback appreciated

Postby Jorf » Fri Jan 29, 2016 6:00 am

Hey all,
I'm working towards making enough songs for an album, so any feedback would be helpful.

Big Daddy - I tried to make a heavier rock song. There's a slow pitch bend that I couldn't get to sound quite right.

Buster Only - Mega man style song. I think it turned out alright.

Into the Light - Got more experimental with this one, sorry about all the instruments.

Cheers.
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Re: A few songs - Feedback appreciated

Postby Neonchiptune » Fri Jan 29, 2016 6:30 am

Very well rounded work you have, so far! I especially love the vibe of your "Big Daddy" track.
Although your song "into the light" could use some more work as I feel the pitch takes away some of the character at the beginning.

Aside from my nitpicking, these are all pretty cool. I don't have much more advice to offer so just keep at it!
Are all of these tracks going to be in the same album?

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Re: A few songs - Feedback appreciated

Postby Cat_of_Ananke » Fri Jan 29, 2016 9:41 am

These are all pretty nice, I like Into the Light the most.
It may just be me, but Big Daddy really reminds me of Inanimate Dream with that phrase going down from the third to the seventh.
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Re: A few songs - Feedback appreciated

Postby Tobikomi » Fri Jan 29, 2016 11:31 pm

This is some awesome stuff you have here! I really love Into the Light! Keep up the good work!
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Re: A few songs - Feedback appreciated

Postby Shywolf » Sat Jan 30, 2016 12:25 am

Nice work so far with these, especially on Big Daddy.

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Re: A few songs - Feedback appreciated

Postby meegosh » Sat Jan 30, 2016 11:18 pm

Very cool stuff. Here's a quick rundown of my thoughts:

Big Daddy: Cool vibe - makes me think of Kurt Russell a la Big Trouble In Little China. The drum parts can be developed more (not sure if you're keeping them less busy or if they're maybe just in the early stages). The tempo can maybe come up a bit but not by much.

Buster Only: Definitely captured the Mega Man vibe. Maybe add a hihat-esque noise on the off beat of some of the hits/fills. With multiple instruments striking the same hits and pauses frequently it sometimes felt a little disjointed - a light tap in the pauses might help keep the flow. Maybe introduce the Mega Man toms/dive-bombs/whatever-they're-called earlier in the song.

Into the Light: Very cool ideas. Liked a lot of the chord changes.

Awesome stuff. Interested to hear the next set.

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Re: A few songs - Feedback appreciated

Postby Xyz » Mon Feb 01, 2016 2:58 am

+1 big daddy. Good basslines, good lines
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Postby DMT Produktionen » Mon Feb 01, 2016 2:22 pm

I really like the second one.

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Re: A few songs - Feedback appreciated

Postby Potentialing » Tue Feb 23, 2016 8:33 pm

I like your melodies! I hope you don't mind me messing with your songs, but I made a quick edit of "Into The Light" because I heard something really nice in it (I didn't do the whole thing, though). I also made a very tiny edit to Big Daddy to add some small embellishments like pitchbends/vibrato/note release and a hi-hat for the drums.

There's a lot of rough sections but I'm hoping this might give you some ideas for the songs.
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Re: A few songs - Feedback appreciated

Postby ca7chi » Tue Feb 23, 2016 11:13 pm

Into the light is awesome!!! good work