(2A03+N163) He Who Protects Those He Once Feared

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Teuthida
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Re: (2A03+N163) He Who Protects Those He Once Feared

Postby Teuthida » Sun Jan 06, 2019 4:36 pm

I like the melody on this one. My main problem with this module is its lack of substance. You only use 4 channels at a time, when you have 6 available in total. You have many options for how you can use these extra channels, and you should try experimenting with what you can do with them, especially with the triangle channel. The song also feels like it ends too abruptly, so you should either let the N163 channel section end more satisfyingly or extend it out. You should also consider replacing your note cut with note release to make them sound fuller. I usually recommend against putting any major part of a song at full volume (you won't have any room to get louder) but it's not that big of a problem here.
I also noticed that your song has a lot of arps in it. For this reason, I seriously recommend getting and using j0CC-FamiTracker, which has an arpeggio scheme feature that will make using arps a lot simpler than what you're doing right now. j0CC has a lot of useful features besides arp schemes, too, so it's definitely worth looking into. (Most of these critiques wouldn't have been possible without me looking at the module file. Furthermore, if you posted your module from the beginning, you could receive feedback on it before uploading it to YouTube, making the final product better).

Admittedly, I'm not a big fan of the art you used for the video. It's rougher aesthetic and themes don't fit the song very well, and it could potentially turn off viewers.
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Re: (2A03+N163) He Who Protects Those He Once Feared

Postby Naijeru-Kun » Sun Jan 06, 2019 6:44 pm

Teuthida wrote:I like the melody on this one. My main problem with this module is its lack of substance. You only use 4 channels at a time, when you have 6 available in total. You have many options for how you can use these extra channels, and you should try experimenting with what you can do with them, especially with the triangle channel. The song also feels like it ends too abruptly, so you should either let the N163 channel section end more satisfyingly or extend it out. You should also consider replacing your note cut with note release to make them sound fuller. I usually recommend against putting any major part of a song at full volume (you won't have any room to get louder) but it's not that big of a problem here.
I also noticed that your song has a lot of arps in it. For this reason, I seriously recommend getting and using j0CC-FamiTracker, which has an arpeggio scheme feature that will make using arps a lot simpler than what you're doing right now. j0CC has a lot of useful features besides arp schemes, too, so it's definitely worth looking into. (Most of these critiques wouldn't have been possible without me looking at the module file. Furthermore, if you posted your module from the beginning, you could receive feedback on it before uploading it to YouTube, making the final product better).

Admittedly, I'm not a big fan of the art you used for the video. It's rougher aesthetic and themes don't fit the song very well, and it could potentially turn off viewers.


Yes I will admit this track is not the best thing we’ve ever made, we didn’t put maximum effort into it. All it’s supposed to be is an “Encounter” theme for the Nigelopian guy Donovan, like in an RPG or something. It could easily be modified if we were actually going to use it in a video game or something. Since it’s the encounter theme, we decided to keep it simple. Later, we will compose Donovan’s “action” theme which will be a much more ambitious piece of music that uses the same motifs.

The reason that art looks like that is because it fits the story of what happened to Donovan in Nigelopia. He used to be a scared, maniacal lunatic who would shoot women in the posterior, but then, thanks to Reina and Shauna, he became a good man and is now one of their closest friends.
The Youtube for Dark Paradise Nigelopia music: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCcILOE ... N1c-pwynjA

An explanation of all this: https://www.deviantart.com/nigelopiahq/ ... -778549988

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Re: (2A03+N163) He Who Protects Those He Once Feared

Postby Teuthida » Sun Jan 06, 2019 7:16 pm

I hate to say this, but it really has more to do with the quality of the art. If it were better drawn, it might work better for the song, but as it is, it feels juvenile and isn't helping to represent the song at all.
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Re: (2A03+N163) He Who Protects Those He Once Feared

Postby Naijeru-Kun » Sun Jan 06, 2019 7:28 pm

Teuthida wrote:I hate to say this, but it really has more to do with the quality of the art. If it were better drawn, it might work better for the song, but as it is, it feels juvenile and isn't helping to represent the song at all.


It’s alright. The other tracks have better art
The Youtube for Dark Paradise Nigelopia music: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCcILOE ... N1c-pwynjA

An explanation of all this: https://www.deviantart.com/nigelopiahq/ ... -778549988


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